Becky c/p

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Becky c/p
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Wed, 09-12-2012 - 9:59pm

Dearest Becky you will be missed dearly. As I sit here and write this tears flow. You may have been a cat but to me you were special. You were my pride and joy. You were like a child to me and because of that your death hurts me so. May your memory live on, on my heart? With a heavy heart I let you go. Maybe I’ll see you in the new world. In the meantime you always be with me.

 

This poem is dedicated to my cat Becky who I had to put down on 9-11-12.

 

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Registered: 07-13-2008
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Fri, 09-14-2012 - 9:23am

Betlic40,

I'm so sorry Becky is lost to you! But I'm sure you wouldn't have put her down unless you had no choice.

Do you want to work on this poem some more? How about putting down some details of how she felt and what she did--the funny things that made her different from other cats. And maybe don't tell us she's a cat--let us guess as we read.

Jackie

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Fri, 09-14-2012 - 11:19am

I'm so sorry for your loss. Even knowing  that you did the right thing for Becky doesn't ease your pain.   I agree with Jackie's comments.

 

Roberta

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Registered: 06-13-1999
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Thu, 09-20-2012 - 9:21am

So sorry for your loss, dear.  Consider Jackie's suggestions -- writing always helps the poet in times of grief.

:heart:

"It is with a strange malice / That I distort the world." -- from The Weeping Burgher by Wallace Stevens
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In reply to: adetelyu
Sun, 09-30-2012 - 7:01am

I love your details! They make me want to smile, too! Are you willing to work on it some more? You have laid it out as a paragraph (prose) rather than in poetic lines. Why not play around with the lines, something like this:

As I sit here and write this

tears flow.

I will always remember

the way you would paw at the treats

the way you used to play with the string (AND SO ON)

 

Just a suggestion, Jackie

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Registered: 07-13-2008
In reply to: adetelyu
Wed, 10-10-2012 - 3:11pm

Hi -

I think it's not about how it looks, but how it works. Does it work for you?

I understand your poem much better now that you have different-sized spaces after and before the lines. The spaces--the silence--tells me what is important to you. 

Thanks for this, and keep writing!

Jackie