Elie Mite

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Registered: 06-20-2003
Elie Mite
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Thu, 11-08-2012 - 4:35pm

Autumn and its wet cold has my mind in respect.

I must face once again winter without you honey.

Where are you ? Who can read about your only poems.

From one place to another, your missing is injuring

The skies, seas and lands...

Answer back please ! Be rude at me ! Let me read once again your lovely words.

 

Fred

 

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Registered: 08-07-2012
In reply to: fred312
Sat, 11-10-2012 - 10:03pm

I think this poem is nice.

iVillage Member
Registered: 06-20-2003
In reply to: fred312
Mon, 11-12-2012 - 3:19pm
Merci
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Registered: 12-15-2004
In reply to: fred312
Mon, 11-12-2012 - 5:38pm

Hi Fred, good to hear from you again.  As always with your poems, there is a quaint and lovely vibe running through it.  I have no desire to alter your words as I would surely destroy the love that you so admirably seem to inject in your posts.  Bon chance mon ami.

 

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Registered: 07-13-2008
In reply to: fred312
Tue, 11-13-2012 - 6:27am

Fred, this is beautiful! I love the last verse, especially:  "Be rude to me!" Great!

How about changing "has my mind in respect" to "makes my mind reflect?" I think that's what you mean.

Love it!

Jackie

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Registered: 06-20-2003
In reply to: fred312
Tue, 12-04-2012 - 5:27pm

Yes.

fred.