Hard time getting in!poem..c/p

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Registered: 10-19-1998
Hard time getting in!poem..c/p
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Thu, 01-31-2013 - 3:16am


took forever to reset my password!! and I don't know if this will show up rght, tried to edit it but if it all runs together again, not gonna keep fooling around trying to get the lines right...don't like when the format changes...yu learn to manuver and then they go and switch to another over and over. ell, hello to all...been awhile I know.

words, they tumble
stones piled too high

few find their way
some become lost
tangled in a web 
voices muffled
meanings twisted
hidden in a haze
of cotton candy
or consumed
in thunderous thought
and dark places
places where you languish
where steps made of sand
wash away with tears
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Registered: 10-19-1998
Thu, 01-31-2013 - 3:26am

aaaaargh! I knew it would screw up again...why is that?? In the preview it looked fine. 2 lines space 2 lines space...simple enough...what the heck??

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Registered: 01-28-2000
Fri, 02-01-2013 - 10:21am

Hi Char,

I love your poem. In the past few months I've felt the same way when trying to get any poetry out of my jumbled thoughts before the fragments tumble away, are consumed,or seem unworthy.

You said that you wanted this to be formatted with a space after every two lines. What about grouping three lines at a time? I think that the lines would flow together more smoothly, with some lines in the same stanza as the lines they modify.

Thanks for posting this, Char.  Maybe I'll search my own pile of tumbled words and try to salvage or reconstruct something readable.

Roberta

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Registered: 10-19-1998
Sun, 02-03-2013 - 11:26pm

Thanks for the suggestion Roberta. And I feel relieved that I'm not alone on this...I have piles of poems , finished and some not, that I just can't seem to do anything with other than shuffle the piles from place to place and making no real headway.Looking forward to reading your work once again!

Char

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Registered: 07-13-2008
Sat, 02-23-2013 - 5:40pm
Good to know I'm not the only one! You've described what I'm going through exactly.