Susan, this is so amazing that I had to read it twice before I could even speak. My own breath was caught as I felt myself at the scene watching. The power of this is mighty.
I offer the following, but keep or lose as always.
There, between the canyon walls; between the front door and the back and in that aft-sun. This little year
Roberta - Thanks so much for your kind words... I'm glad it was believable - that's definitely a goal to aspire to. :)
Vee - Thanks so much for the crit... I appreciate it. I'm glad you found it powerful... It's one of those work poems - had to write an article about a house fire this past week. Then said house fire found its way into my poetry as well.
I knew it, I knew it, I knew it!
Oh Susan, I am so sorry, and glad you have your poetry after being exposed to such things.
You really brought out the sadness, the loss felt. Wonderful piece!
Knew what, Pat? That it's a work poem? Of course it is (albeit a heavily fictionalized one). Thank you for the kind words - I'm not the best... you're better. :)
Thanks, Vee. Fires aren't the worst. They are bad, yes. But what happens after a fire is that the whole community wraps its arms around someone and makes sure they have more than enough of what they need. We haven't had a fatal fire here since well before I started working for the paper... So the worst with fires tends to be that someone just lost their belongings and their home, but they're alive and loved and looked after.
The worst thing to cover is fatal car accidents. Suicides are right up there too. It's a small town, so those aren't really common things but they do happen. Car accidents, in particular, seem to happen in a series... We won't have any for a while and then we'll have a bunch in just a matter of weeks. And, because it's a small town, chances are I know who it happened to and I have to write about it anyway, bearing in mind that the family and friends of that person will be reading what I write and there is a potential that what I write could add to their pain.
Thank you for your kind words, Rae. :)