Pore Over c/p

iVillage Member
Registered: 01-21-2006
Pore Over c/p
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Thu, 11-18-2010 - 9:53am

Have some tightening I am working on this morning.

iVillage Member
Registered: 07-13-2008
Thu, 11-18-2010 - 6:22pm

Stacey, I can feel this one because it's what I do.

iVillage Member
Registered: 01-21-2006
Thu, 11-18-2010 - 7:56pm

Thanks Jackie!

iVillage Member
Registered: 06-13-1999
Thu, 11-18-2010 - 7:59pm

Okay, the stabbing is bothering me.

"It is with a strange malice / That I distort the world." -- from The Weeping Burgher by Wallace Stevens
iVillage Member
Registered: 01-21-2006
Thu, 11-18-2010 - 10:05pm

So true!

iVillage Member
Registered: 07-15-2000
Fri, 11-19-2010 - 11:44pm

Stacey, love the second stanza---Distance grows

Poetry contains almost all you need to know about life

--Josephine Hart

iVillage Member
Registered: 01-21-2006
Sat, 11-20-2010 - 12:07pm

I have been stumbling over that wording too.

iVillage Member
Registered: 05-13-2000
Sat, 11-20-2010 - 10:57pm

Wow, women, are you listening? That last section is powerful. I read the other posts, and thought that perhaps changing focus to "focused" and onto to "on" might work. Steer me to the right side of the road if I am misunderstanding the thought.

Embrace change.
iVillage Member
Registered: 01-28-2000
Sun, 11-21-2010 - 2:54pm

How about changing

"all the while focus

onto blank eyes"

iVillage Member
Registered: 01-21-2006
Wed, 12-01-2010 - 9:22pm

Roberta!