Perspectives

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Registered: 02-15-2012
Perspectives
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Fri, 02-17-2012 - 10:16am

Thanks so much for the warm welcome!

Below is a link to a blog I created with the first 5 chapters of a story I am writing. I need help!! :)

I am confused about perspective and would love thoughts on this. The story is about a family whose youngest daughter suffered brain damage in a near drowning accident. Currently, the prologue and epilogue are very short and are written in the perspective of Lily, the daughter. The other chapters mostly switch between the perspectives of the parents, Julie and Jay, with a few chapters from the older siblings, Avery and Simone. The pros of this are that is covers all the varying view points and shows how each family member is so angry with the other. It shows how each individual is affected by the accident. That said, I am not sure if it is too confusing, switching between too many perspectives. Does this work?? Would love any thoughts you can share, and feel free to be as honest as possible :)

http://nikki-thegirlwholearnedtofly.blogspot.com/

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Registered: 02-25-2012
Mon, 02-27-2012 - 1:18am

Your prolog is crafted with poetic imagery, is compelling, and has a very candid feel. Most of the time a prolog is used as backstory to establish a character. The general feeling in writing is to avoid backstory, and instead either develop the character elsewhere in the narrative, or, assuming the backstory is necessary to move the plot or character development forward, to include it as a full element/chapter of the story. In your story, I find it compelling enough to consider it an essential

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Registered: 11-14-2008
Thu, 02-23-2012 - 10:41am

Please do let us know how it goes... and most definitely when it's finished and published. Like lady, I want to read the rest of the story! LOL

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Registered: 12-09-2005
Mon, 02-20-2012 - 10:44am

Thank you so much for the encouragement! :)


                             
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Registered: 12-17-1998
Sat, 02-18-2012 - 12:17pm

I can't wait to read the rest of the book! I don't find the perspectives confusing at all, either. This is going to be a great book, and I will be buying it either on my Nook or in paperback. Keep going!

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Registered: 11-14-2008
Fri, 02-17-2012 - 3:15pm

I personally don't find perspectives from the different characters hard to follow and I think you'd done a very nice job with it!

Honestly, I was riveted