Watching Me

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Registered: 01-27-2007
Watching Me
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Sun, 07-05-2009 - 9:38pm
The night before I was to return from my trip, I was wanting you so badly. You were on my mind the entire time I was gone, but tonight I was feeling especially needy for you.

I had my bath and had set the alarm on my phone to wake me very early for my flight home. My bags were packed and I was finished with all I had to do. I had just one small lamp on in the room and was sitting on the bed sipping the last of a glass of Stoli. The

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Registered: 12-06-2004
Tue, 07-07-2009 - 1:21pm

Fantastic. You had me at the title this time: "Watching Me" got me going before I even clicked on the story. My favorite parts below:

Nice part about what it feels like for your breasts to become aroused. I don't think I've ever heard that described so well.

"I traced my fingertips up and across my folds." - Mmmm, nice word, folds. I love folds. Especially because unfolding is usually gonna happen soon.

"I let my legs relax and open more...the bareness I know you would want to see." - Yes, very nice. You do seem to know exactly what a guy wants to watch.

"I trace my finger along my slit feeling the drops of moisture that are there, letting my finger part me ever so slightly." - Delicious. Couldn't stop reading now if the room was on fire. Actually, it is getting rather warm in here.

"...want so much for you to see me taste myself." - Dang woman. Just the tasting is hot enough, but wanting him to see her, yowza.

"I am aching now, and that beautiful throbbing has begun." - Wonderful. You could tell me more about that. I would read a whole story by you about just that.

"I spread myself open, wanting you to see me." - I paused right there, reading that sentence over and over for a long time, wallowing in the eroticism of it. There is another delicious story there too. This time he is with her, sitting between her legs. She tells him to watch, he must not touch. She wants to see her effect on him. She plays with her wetness as he watches, then spreads herself open for him. What does she feel? What does he see? What does she see in his eyes, in his face? What does he do? What does she tell him to do? Oh please write that story.

"I take one hand and keep myself spread..." - omg, how do you get inside the male brain (mine at least) and know just what we want to read? Amazing.

The rest of it is just a warm fuzzy blur to me. I'll try to comment on it tomorrow, if you'd like. Thanks for another great lunch break.

Jake

P.S. My fantasy is that this story was something you actually did write while away from your lover and sent to him before your return home. If so, thanks for sharing it with us as well.

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Registered: 01-27-2007
Sun, 07-12-2009 - 2:39pm

Jake, your generous praise makes me feel very humble and proud at the same time.


I will simply

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Registered: 03-17-2009
Mon, 07-13-2009 - 4:01pm
You really know how to set your stories up in a way which grabs the readers attention. The way you set the stage is concise without unnecessary details. I quickly think, "Yes, I know this room, have been alone in it, have anticipated leaving the next morning, have thought about my lover in the dark silence, have seen the moonlight you see..." A nostalgia within myself is awakened by your vivid, potent

 


 


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Registered: 01-27-2007
Sat, 07-18-2009 - 8:46pm
Thank you Ivy. Your comments are helpful and I appreciate them very much.

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Registered: 01-16-2009
Sun, 07-26-2009 - 12:02am

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