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| Tue, 02-07-2006 - 12:40pm |
Hi everyone,
I'm really new to this site and saw this thread. I definitely could use help. I posted my profile on Match.com in November and have had a LOT of lookers. The guys who have responded are not what I'm looking for at all - either not in my age range, live way out of my area, or something about their appearance that's a turn-off. I do have a child, but I've seen (heard) of other women with children who have caught a nice-looking, intelligent guy. Could you read my profile and assist me? Do you think I should come up with something a bit more catchy to start with?
The pictures are pretty up-to-date.
My username is cutehonest.
I'm really new to this site and saw this thread. I definitely could use help. I posted my profile on Match.com in November and have had a LOT of lookers. The guys who have responded are not what I'm looking for at all - either not in my age range, live way out of my area, or something about their appearance that's a turn-off. I do have a child, but I've seen (heard) of other women with children who have caught a nice-looking, intelligent guy. Could you read my profile and assist me? Do you think I should come up with something a bit more catchy to start with?
The pictures are pretty up-to-date.
My username is cutehonest.

First, the profile pic with the child in it has to go. Move that to the other pics and take any of those excellent facial pictures and use them as your profile picture. You are showcasing yourself as a potential date, not your child. Also, put yourself in a dress and get a nice full-body shot in something other than sweatpants.
Next, your profile:
"About me: I'm someone who is creative, hard-working, kind-hearted, and fun. I'm a positive person and believe life's too short to not enjoy. I also have a great sense of humor and personality. If you're looking for someone who has that special sparkle, is adventurous, yet also enjoys quiet times, then look no further."
Although that is a great paragraph, anybody could have written it. It almost feels like you have cut and pasted it from someone else. Tell us about who you are and what you bring to the table.
"The man I'm looking for has a myriad of wonderful qualities, which would include: someone who takes care of himself, takes pride in his work, loves life, is fun to be with, yet also have a serious side, is a responsible individual who has a sense of humor, someone who could be my best friend, and wants to build a serious relationship, even marriage. Most important, he must be honest and trustworthy. And there should be chemistry between us obviously to make a great relationship work. I'm ready for the next step, to find that special someone who would love me with his whole heart as I would him."
Again that could be anybody. And should there about 3 paragraphs above this one describing who YOU are? Everyone sees themselves as honest and trustworthy, be more specific.
"Just to let you know from the start, I'm a single parent of a six-year-old child. Of course, he's the cutest, most awesome child in the whole world. Family values are important because that's where traditions are born and respected."
Um, are you looking for a boyfriend or a new father for your child? You are jumping the gun here. Just say that you have a wonderful child who gets along with everyone.
"Like I said earlier, I believe that special someone is out there and who knows it could be you."
Again, extremely generic.
Now let's get to a much better paragraphs:
Fun:
"Adventurous, spontaneous and fun, I also enjoy quiet evenings. During the warm months I love anything water--boating, jet skiiing, etc. Colder months, I'm all about sports, reading, and movies."
Water boating? What kind? Bass fishing? Cigarette? Do you own a boat?
Jet Skiing? Where? On what lake?
Cold weather sports? Which ones? Where?
Reading? What books?
Movies? Which ones?
BTW, where did you grow up? Where did you go to school? Why do you like Missouri?
Travel:
"Love to cruise, to get away, go camping--love to travel so any place is great. Not really into the bar scene, but like karaoke bars. Favorite vacation- Hawaii. Would love to try skydiving. Into Nascar-it'd be nice to drive the track."
Cruise where?
Camp where?
Travel where?
Karaoke where?
What did you do in Hawaii?
Nascar? Which track?
Flesh yourself out and tell us about yourself. Then explain what type of man you want: A traveler, a water lover, nice to kids, type of job.
I think it looks great overall.
Just a few suggestions:
Shorten the headline to two or three words - it's too long to be catchy.
Post one or two photos *only* and, ideally, post a full body shot as well as one or two great, smiling face shots. Too many photos just clutter the page and are not necessary. Pick the best ones.
Also, I don't think the fact that you have a child is a negative for online dating at all. It very well *might* turn off someone when they see you definitely want three more. Save the discussion of how many children for when you're actually dating someone. (I do think you should say you want more kids, just don't give a number).
Edited 2/7/2006 6:53 pm ET by tallgirlcolo
AJ, enjoying life with C.
However, to you and anyone who takes the time to give me some advice, a very heartfelt thanks.
As for the full body shot, I agree with that also. I just have to find one that I'm comfortable with. Some of the most available are either not clear, too dark, too far away, or somehow not acceptable. I also will be working on finding a great shot.