Critique my profile

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Registered: 03-26-2006
Critique my profile
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Wed, 03-29-2006 - 9:39pm
Alright, ladies, and Chris. Here's your chance to give me some pointers. First, let me say that I do get winks, etc, but not by the type of men I am usually attracted to, namely bikers or some derivitive or guys who are too old, or guys who are WAY too young. When I wink at the guys I'm interested in, they almost always respond. I've dated a few, but never get a second date with any of the ones I'd like to see again. My profile says basically what I'm looking for and who I am but I'd like to add to you all that I'm looking for a clean cut, athletic, but not too much so, a guy who enjoys golf and tennis and other sports, but doesn't sit on the couch watching endless sports drinking beer. I have a real aversion to men who watch Nascar. I have a son so it's important that he "father" my child. My son needs a positive male role model. Single dads are great. I'm a natural type of woman, no make up, no prissy crap. I'm feminine, but natural. I think it's very important that we share common interests, at least a couple, and I'm totally open to learning and experiencing new things. Alright, put your thinking caps on and sharpen your pencils, and if you can help me to "refine" this thing, I'd really appreciate it. I am UPSEEKER on Match. Thanks in advance. A
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Registered: 03-15-2004
Thu, 03-30-2006 - 2:46am

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Registered: 05-31-2005
Thu, 03-30-2006 - 6:42am

Hi there and welcome!


I took a look at your profile and here's my opinion... I would take out these sentences: <>

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Registered: 04-28-2004
Thu, 03-30-2006 - 8:46am

Kerry makes good points - and also try to avoid the B-word if you can (e.g. "clean cut, BUT...", "enjoys sports, BUT...", "feminine, BUT..."). I may not be representative of the male dating audience, but when sampling the online ads I'm much more receptive to women who use simple, unqualified statements that don't require Magisterial interpretation. ;)


One personal suggestion: Challenge your recipients...always say you're looking for a "man" or "gentleman" (i.e. not a "guy"). A man is an adult who respects women and tries to set a good example for children; a guy is someone you drink and play poker with. (Hollywood example: Denzel Washington is a man. Adam Sandler is a guy. LOL)



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Registered: 03-26-2006
Thu, 03-30-2006 - 8:00pm
Thanks for all your input. I'll fix it up using your suggestions and let you know when it's ready for viewing again.