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| Thu, 02-02-2006 - 8:42pm |
I've lurked on this board for quite awhile and have learned so much..Thanks to all of you that post your sage advice! I love hearing and relating to what all have to share..
Im currently on Match.com and have met with a few men...so far none have panned out. Either they were on drugs, drunk, too boring etc.. Would you all mind taking a look at my profile and letting me know what you think? I think Im attracting the wrong type of men..
Thanks!
Edited 2/13/2006 9:35 pm ET by tracylynn34fl

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Hello and welcome!
First of all, I would get rid of the two pics that have other people in them.
Thanks for your tips, Stacey.
Yeah, your probably right about the photos with the other women...
I also want to compliment you on your weight loss! Your avatar photo looks great!
Thank you!
I think your profile looks great - you have nice photos up, you list specific things you like to do, etc.
The only thing I would change is the length of your intro - it's a bit long.
I would take out:
"How do I go about describing myself in such a way without the ususal generic words used that can apply to everyone else? But then I realized that we are all more similar than different and that making a connection with others, goes beyond the adjectives that are used."
Everyone says they don't know how to describe themselves. Start with something that's uniquely you -- it shows that you know yourself well and you like yourself. Starting with "how do I describe myself?" comes across as noncommital to me.
I would also take out the photo disclaimer at the end. If they looked at your main photo, it's obvious who you are in the other two.
Good luck!! :) OLD takes time, but it can be fun and there are good people out there in the mix.
AJ, enjoying life with C.
Does anyone else have any opinions/advice?
Thanks!
I think your profile is mostly great, so I'll stick to my specialty - the proofreading/nitpicking. ;)
Under "for fun" section it says "the the theatre" (oops... lol)
Under job "I have my all of my licenses" nix the extra "my"
Under education "school" not "scool" - or better yet, lose the highschool thing altogether, too long ago to be relevant. What about college and/or your professional training?
Body art you checked "none" AND "pierced ears" how did it even let you do that? lol... Uncheck "none".
Under your match criteria you say you're looking for someone "not sure" about kids? That seems a little odd especially if YOU say probably not. Wouldn't you also be looking for someone with a no or probably not?
Also keep in mind though, that most of the guys don't pay that much attention to words. It's a good thing you take nice pictures. ;P
So the words that matter most are the headline & first sentence. You definitely need a better headline than "stop on by"... maybe ask your friends to describe you and your perfect man in 3 words and pick one of each!
I'd also say lose the beginning ("How do I go about describing myself") maybe start out with that "The way I see it, we are all more similar than different...." or find a snappier opening line. The pic descriptions are unnecessary. If you must keep one group photo, I'd keep the couch one... the 3-shot is kinda creepy 'cause you all look so similar! ;)
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Thank you so much! I must have proof read my profile a million and one times and have never noticed one of the typo's that you have mentioned..I'll correct them as soon as I finish this post..
OK, I see what you meant about the kids section...Im really not sure. I have 2 children now (15 & 12) and still have not decided if I want more or not..Some days I do and some days I don't...I'll have to correct this..
Believe it or not, I added the descriptions with the group photos because it seemed that every other e-mail i received, questioned who I was in the photos..Huh?
LMAO The photo with the three women are my sisters and I...No wonder we look similar! But, creepy?
Sorry, "creepy" was a bad choice of word LOL.. but just that you look SO similar. I usually assume group pictures on OLD are friends. But now the fact that you are sisters explains it. :)
Sometimes we miss the typos BECAUSE we've read it too many times to notice anymore!
Hi Tracy,
When I read your profile, I noticed you had restaurant misspelled in the bio section: it's not restaraunts.
You also mentioned twice in the same sentence how you like wine. Once is enough--it might appear that you are a BIG drinker.
Now this is just my opinion but you can break up your bio into smaller paragraphs--it makes the reading easier.
I agree with previous posters that you should proofread the spelling errors, take out How to describe myself section (that wastes words). Use the words to positively describe either what you're looking for or about yourself.
Hope this helps and good luck on your search.
for the smaller paragraphs... match doesn't automatically put in breaks for you if you type in a carriage return.
So, add
at the end of each paragraph to get the break to show up.
Took me forever to figure that out.
AJ, enjoying life with C.
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