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Need some critical advice!
| Sat, 11-10-2007 - 1:39pm |
Ok group, I have been lurking and placing responses here and there for a while.
| Sat, 11-10-2007 - 1:39pm |
Ok group, I have been lurking and placing responses here and there for a while.
From a guy who has been dating online for 8 years:
“I may not have the body …” This starts off as a negative. First sentence (photo) needs to reach out and grab my attention in a positive manner.
I DO like the smile and eyes similes.
I real feel the energy in the rest of your profile, especially the Harley reference.
The couch potato reference is cliché. I am not sure how many people actually think of themselves as couch potatoes, much less admit to it. The superficial guy remark focus on what you do not want and therefore negative.
Focus on what you do want and the positive. The snowball fight and scrabble references are good examples of what you want.
The cuddling on the couch is cliché as well.
Insofar as being loving and emotionally available is something that really needs to be experienced and found out during the face-to-face encounters and cannot really be screened out/in by having it on a profile IMHO.
Good luck,
Mark
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May your soul be at rest.
May your heart remain open.
May you realize your own true nature.
May you be healed.
May you be a source of healing for the world. - a zen prayer
I would take out anything negative - otherwise love it - it shows you have a sense of adventure and an open heart and a lot to offer.