Critique my profile please.....
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| Tue, 07-05-2005 - 6:34pm |
Hi girls,
I haven't had much luck meeting women online. Can you critique my profile and be honest about anything you think I should change. Thanks :)
Hi,
Thanks for checking out my profile. I have a real zest for life, I’m spontaneous and I love to just wing it. I’m definitely the adventuresome type. I’m always open to new ideas, I love challenges and I’m very curious.
I’m looking for a relationship with someone who shares my interests and activities. I love exploring new ways to energize a relationship. I really like giving small gestures of love out of the blue just to make that special someone smile. I’m a true romantic but I would like someone who can work along with me, building a secure, happy relationship���…..together.
My background is European, so I have visited often and love to travel. I also enjoy photography and art but I like to mountain bike, go hiking, and participate in group sports. Oh, did I mention I can cook? Pretty good too.
I have a great career (in Finance), and I’ve been working for the same firm for more than 5 years. I own my own place and live in Mississauga. I have a great family and lots of good friends. I get along with most people and love being in social settings.
On my physical points, I’m fit, I workout daily. I’m 6’2” 175 LBS.
About you: You should be in your 20’s – 30. In shape, employed, white, non smoker. You like to have fun and don’t have a chip on your shoulder. You’re willing to try new things, and have a sense of adventure.
If I’ve sent you a smile, I’ve read your profile and like it. If you want me to send you an email send me a smile back, or just email me.
Good Luck :)
C.

Hi, and welcome to the board.
My general feedback is that your profile is too general and generic. Get into specifics about your activities and interests, to give readers a better idea of what you're all about. Also, what TYPE of relationship are you looking for? I'd assume that you're basically looking for something casual, from reading your profile. Is that the case?
Does the site you're on not give you a place to list your vital stats (height, etc)? If it does, no need to repeat it in the profile. Same with what you're looking for in a match.
Sheri
Well, I thought you sounded rather delightful--just a couple of decades too young for me, alas. However, I agree with Sheri that specific is always better. I've taught college English, and boy, is that something that has to be continually emphasized in class.
One reason to be specific in an OLD profile is so that you will sound more genuine, and not like a dozen or so other guys. I also agree that you should not repeat any facts or preferences that are stated in the checklist that is provided on OLD sites like Match and Yahoo. If you have already stated your height, stating it again can sound egotistic. If there is a checklist for racial preferences, use that rather than mentioning anything in the body of your profile. I imagine some women would be charmed by your making your entire second paragraph about how romantic you are, but I know that some women are suspicious of anything too overblown. They may think you are a "player" (or as we used to say, a Casanova). On the other hand, you emphasize that you want a "secure" relationship and that you have a steady job and your own home, so maybe you can just go ahead and make it clear that you are hoping to eventually find someone permanent...however you want to express it.
I like the way you emphasized adventure, as I do that in my profiles as well.
How long has your profile been up? Is it on a site that seems to have lots of activity? Or maybe you live in an area without enough single people who are on this dating site. Are women not responding to your emails? If you are only sending Winks, Smiles, etc., is this a site where you can send actual emails--because personally, I only respond to those timid winks/smiles when I am desperate. :)
Thanks for the advice so far. The profile is posted on Lava Life. Lot's of traffic to the site and I live in the Toronto area so I know there are lots of single women. Keep the tips coming, I really appreciate them.
Cheers!