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|Wed, 11-29-2006 - 1:50pm|
I'm doing an edit of one of my WIPs looking for verbs with -ing (that's a sign of a prefect tense right? lol). Along with my *sin* of using adverbs too much, I find I use lots of these -ing verbs and often in the form of gerunds starting a sentence. Seems I really like noun phrases (still remember diagramming sentences with Dr. Shelke and the rest of the class being mostly lost of she and I enjoyed the nuances of the English language hehe). Are these gerunds a weakness, tho, maybe a sign of sloppy writing?
Adding the paragraph in my WIP that lead me to this question:
Holding her with one arm The Queen pulled the chair out from the desk and, mindful of Mearr's comfort, eased into the chair. His expression tender, he smiled at her as she squirmed for a few moments before settling back against him. Noticing a blinking light on his answering machine, he pushed a button and after a moment, a voice issued from it. While listening to his messages, he leaned forward to turn on his computer and, with mouse in hand, began cruising through his email.
I enjoy the way the paragraph reads overall. It is made up of several actions that are happening at the same time as other actions and I can't seem to picture any other way of showing that fluidity of movement.
Love and Light, Joelle
Homeschooling mom to an