"Identifying the Enemy" c/p

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"Identifying the Enemy" c/p
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Sun, 09-21-2003 - 5:08pm
Sorry, guys - the muse is in rare form this weekend and won't shut up.

~ Identifying the Enemy ~

I am the

poet

who dangles prepositions

I am the

poet

who throws

ings carelessly about.

I am the

poet

who over-uses Ands, Buts, Sos & That’s.

Tell me not to touch

and my fingerprints

are everywhere.

Don't walk —

I walk.

I must insert the paper clip

into the socket

just for the blue charge.

I am

Mischief,

the naughty two-year old

who plucks

poopies from the potty

and throws them at Kitty.

I am the

boy

with a pea-shooter at five,

rubber band at seven,

handgun at twelve

in his middle-school locker.

I am that boy.

No —

I am a girl,

the one in your seventh-grade class

with pin-straight hair and bright white socks

who started the rumor about your cooties

and laughed at your shoes.

I am the girl

who stole your pimply boyfriend just because

I could,

not because I wanted him.

I am a witch, a viper.

What they don't tell you about girls

is that

girls

have no heart.

A boy will fight another boy for a reason,

a slight, an insult. But a girl?

A girl will slap you

just because you're ugly.

Or you wore that skirt yesterday.

So

I will be the girl,

the female, the

Woman

poet.

I will be the

pebble

in your shoe,

the blister

on your heel,

the hair

in your soup,

continuing to bandy about my

ings

as if they are no more than kisses.





Edited 9/21/2003 5:10:16 PM ET by cl-pat305

 


"It is with a strange malice / That I distort the world." 
 -- from The W

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Sun, 09-21-2003 - 8:18pm
oh too good...it made me 'feel' cant really excuse a person when they make me do that now can i ? hehehe i swear this poem is written in such a way it makes me think about stygian witches:) those were the girls i wrote that for:)

loved this one even though i had that wanting to say no no not you you couldnt possibly have been one of "those" girls LOL you hit on many truths in it though, so many girls dont want to admit sh*t like this and its nice to know im not the only one:)

~kelli
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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 5:16am
I love this poem! It's just so real :)
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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 8:28am
Thank you, Shannon! Glad to see you made it over to the board . . . kick your shoes off and join us for tea; you've been missed!


Edited 9/22/2003 8:29:29 AM ET by cl-pat305

 


"It is with a strange malice / That I distort the world." 
 -- from The W

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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 8:42am
FOCLMBO!!! No, I was not one of "those" girls; it was the seventies - I spent most of the 70's in a smoky haze with a silly grin on my face and a bag of Fritos permenately clutched in my fingers.

Hey - I never responded to your e-mail last week about the chapbook . . . sorry! It's a contest; Pudding House, I believe. I had finished it for Blue Light Press - sixty-five pages, $20 entry fee. Then I started having second thoughts because they said contestents would hear nothing from them until April - that's 7 months away! No monetary prize; publishing only, winner would receive 20 copies.

So I looked around a little more, found Pudding House with a September 30th deadline. They wanted thirty pages max, (I had some severe cutting to do!) but results will come out in January, and there's a $100 cash prize for the winner, plus publishing, plus 20 copies. The hook was the entry fee - only 10 bucks. No joke - those entry/reading fees can add up to MAJOR bucks if you're entering over six contests a year.

 


"It is with a strange malice / That I distort the world." 
 -- from The W

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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 11:03am
well thats good to know:) you seemed to capture that kind of girl thing so well you made me worried that you could write it so perfectly cause you had the inside LOL no apologies for the email thing i dont think when i hit send or reply, its an automatic thing and i dont expect people to owe me a respnse LOL still good luck though!:)
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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 12:25pm
If this is rare form, than I say keep it about! I love what your muse was up to yesterday.

I love this:

I will be the

pebble

in your shoe,

the blister

on your heel,

the hair

in your soup,

Oh, how many times I have felt like this? Great work!


BTW: What do you think of Mr. King's National Book Foundation 2003 Award? Are you with the NYT's or the NBF? Seems to be stirring quite a debate in some circles eh?

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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 12:44pm
I love it Pat! I do wonder about the word placement in this stanza (but it was just how I read it, I'm sure its perfect as it is lol):

with a pea-shooter at five,

rubber band at seven,

handgun at twelve

in his middle-school locker.

It gives me too much pause in the flow. I think because the first two lines didn't need explanation? I'm not sure how to fix it though (the flow in my head of course - besides adding that hole everyone keeps talking about ;)) I do so love the peice tho :)

~Aubs

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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 2:40pm
I drop by the board more often than you may think -- I lurk ... :)

~~Shannon
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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 3:26pm
LOL Good one! You have SO defined it.

You're definitely a Queen Bee, NOT a wannabe.
Embrace change.
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Mon, 09-22-2003 - 7:53pm
And I bee very tired today. I hate Mondays!

 


"It is with a strange malice / That I distort the world." 
 -- from The W

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