My Turn - Query

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Registered: 07-03-2004
My Turn - Query
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Wed, 06-11-2008 - 10:10pm

My book's still in second draft, but I've been periodically revising the query (written before I started it).

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Registered: 09-12-2005
Thu, 06-12-2008 - 11:57am

Oooh, I want to read the book!

My only suggestion is the very first sentence: "Being pursued" is passive and pushes me away. I'd suggest "Pursuit by the paparrazzi and ridicule from politicians" instead of "being pursued by paparazzi and ridiculed by politicians."

Other than that -- I'm ready to pre-order!

It sounds great.

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Registered: 05-04-2003
Thu, 06-12-2008 - 5:42pm

Fantasy is not my genre, but I am always impressed by the imagination and invention in the tales of those who do write it! ;-)


You know I am a WIP when it comes to queries - so if I can help - that's great! If not, ignore me. ha! ha!


Being pursued by paparazzi and ridiculed by politicians makes it hard to be an assassin.

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Sat, 06-14-2008 - 7:34pm

Thanks for the comments!


I went to a writer's conference today (I was running the pitch room), though I wasn't pitching.

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Sat, 06-14-2008 - 8:27pm

Oooooooooh, I'm so jealous. I pmissed out on the Romantic Times writer's conference when it was in Houston - just 30 minutes from me b/c Abigail was only 2 and Deklan was still nursing and I just couldn't get up there -


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Sun, 06-15-2008 - 6:42am

Awesome! I think the book sounds great -- please let us know where it gets picked up. I'll definitely buy a copy!

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