Okay...let's try this again
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|Sat, 04-02-2005 - 7:42pm|
I've rewritten the last part of Chapter 5 AGAIN and reposted for critiquing. Please let me know how this is. I've tried to keep it all in Nicole's POV and I've also gone back and gotten rid of most of the tags and some of the beats in this part as well as in the previous part(s). I didn't see a lot of them in the first 4 chapters.
I also felt it best to change the washtub bit to what I have now. I think it's more natural since it would be hard for Rad to drag the tub and for her to fill and empty it.