TINY TUESDAY (m)

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Tue, 12-04-2001 - 9:44am

TINY TUESDAY (m)


In rounding up the writing with our senses series, let's write a scene or short story that concentrates on touch/skin.

Happy writing,

Mac

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Thu, 12-06-2001 - 1:47pm

Geez Linda....(m)


Couldn't you tell us the rest of the story? I want to read more.

You make it seem so easy and all the details so real, it flows so smooth.

One part bothered me though, the part where she calls her new husband Mr.Thompkins, its sounds way too formal.

You're a great story teller!!

Maria

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Thu, 12-06-2001 - 2:29pm

Beautifully depicted...(m)


I was riding in the cart with Annalee.

I don't know if you are going anywhere with this or if it was just for fun, but I have one "teeny, tiny nit-pic"...you use the word rough several times, and it halted me some. But not enough to interfer with your beautiful story.

The "sun through her dress --like a blush" ...wonderful! And the fires flames and her own internal flame...endearing.

Thank you for sharing this piece Linda.

Good day! Kat

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 7:53am

Brings Back Memories...(m)


Boy, does this EVER bring back memories. Without experiencing it yet, you captured this quite well. Good Job! Sammi

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 8:00am

Welcome to the SSB, Eyewrite...(m)


I've been down with a 'virus' this past week, so I was real pleased to see you as an addition to our board when I got my computer back from the 'hospital.'

Your descriptions were very vivid, kinda brought to mind why I hate to clean fish. LOL! Good job with this, and again, welcome. Sammi

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 8:07am

One Word Comes to Mind...(m)


...as I think about this. Profound. You shared Blake's grief with us very well, and his anger at the insensitivity of another. You really rock with these TT's, Maria! Sammi

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 8:13am

Quite the Twist ...(m)


...you added to your short piece, Mac. You caught my attention with the promise of something sensual, and, boy, did you deliver! But I wasn't expecting to cry! Good job with this, Sammi

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 8:20am

Do You Suppose That a Cafe Mocha Would Induce...(m)


...a similar daydream? LOL! Wow, did you get me revved up. Good job with this. Sammi

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 8:26am

Good Writing With a Very Important Message...(m)


...that every woman should read. You did a good job with this piece, Sammi

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 8:33am

Good Story, Ozarker ...(m)


Is this part of a longer piece? You've captured my interest with these two characters. Sammi

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Fri, 12-07-2001 - 12:25pm

Thanks for reading. I could post instructional photos too if you like... j/k (n/t)


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