TINY TUESDAY (m)

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Tue, 12-18-2001 - 10:22am

TINY TUESDAY (m)


This week, I’m borrowing an idea from an exercise of Jessica Page Morrell’s.

Let’s turn our minds towards our stomachs. Write a short story or scene about a meal, anything from an intimate candlelit dinner for two to a huge family gathering at Christmas will do.

Have fun,

Mac

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Tue, 12-18-2001 - 10:57pm

Hi, Eyewrite (m)


We try to stick to 500 or less but we're not too strict around here. But sometimes, it's hard to get a story out in such few words.

Mac

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Tue, 12-18-2001 - 11:19pm

Mucho Gracious, Kat (m)


I appreciate your comments. I plan to expand this one and will definitely keep Journal of Blue Planet in mind.

Thanks again,

Mac

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Tue, 12-18-2001 - 11:37pm

Good details (m)


I liked this story. I'm with Kat as far as I thought the wife was dead too. But then again, I almost thought he was leaving the crumbs/coffee for his wife to clean up after she got up. Of course, any man that would cook breakfast for himself would clean up. So you got me stumped-LOL- but I enjoyed it anyway.

Mac

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Tue, 12-18-2001 - 11:56pm

Pass me a spoon, please! (m)


Kat,

This was too amusing. I loved it. The see-through negligee and the indention on her face from the cd was so believable. I also found myself pulling for Mr. Sweet-Cheeks to come running across the hall. Oh well, at least she had the ice cream.

Your TT was spectacular!

Mac

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Wed, 12-19-2001 - 1:25am

I never thought of that but I see how ...


a reader would get the impression that the wife was dead. Actually the wife is sleeping in. She sets the table the night before. He leaves his dirty dishes for her to clean up. He manages to leave "evidence" of his presence :)

Thanks for reading! I had fun writing it. Just call me the detail lady.

Eyewrite

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Wed, 12-19-2001 - 1:27am

I second that suggestion - Mac, go for it! :) (nt)


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Wed, 12-19-2001 - 9:53am

Great details eyewrite.(m)


I read your note to mac. Here I was, feeling so sorry for this poor man who still sets a place for his dead wife -- LOL. But I did love the little details of your story. Good work.

Linda

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"We are all apprentices in a craft where no one ever becomes a master." - Ernest Heminway

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Wed, 12-19-2001 - 10:00am

Oh, ooh, OOOHHH!!! Pass me some of that!(nt)


cl-ozarker

"We are all apprentices in a craft where no one ever becomes a master." - Ernest Heminway

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Wed, 12-19-2001 - 10:05am

well, eyewrite (m)


you had me hooked, and I made the mistake of reading the others' comments, and your explanation first. My reaction to this was way off base--and I'm not offering this in a negative way, because I think it's interesting that we all have such different reactions. If anything it says more about me than your writing (which is very good). I found this very sinister and the leaving of his dregs and crust to be an implied threat to his wife--if she was still alive. And of course I thought that his obsessive attention to detail meant that he was probably planning to, or had already, got rid of his wife in a precise and tidy way.

Yikes, e

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Wed, 12-19-2001 - 10:17am

great, Mac (m)


I think this is one of the best things you've written. You should DEFINITELY submit it somewhere (too late for this xmas but that gives you time to tweak it).

e