TINY TUESDAY (m)

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Tue, 01-22-2002 - 10:11am

TINY TUESDAY (m)


A while back, we had a Tiny Tuesday exercise where we all used the same opening sentence for our stories. It was amazing to see how many directions the stories went. So this week, please begin your short story with the following sentence.

I stared at the envelope, reading again the word Briamonte.

Have fun,

Mac

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 12:26pm

Does She...(m)


...ever open it? Mac's right, this is very suspenseful. You did a good job with this exercise. Sammi

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 12:28pm

Mac (m)


Oh Mac that was touching. It really hit home my aunt had did what the mother did. It is still hard to talk about it but the feeling never goes away it just get numb until something is done that triggers it.

Your story was great but I want to know what was said in the enevolope!

Great Job,

Jade

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Jade

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 12:33pm

Talk about needing a tissue (m)


This was terrific, Sammi. Your TT was both sad and sweet and very well written. I know you can't fill in every detail with 500 words, but I was curious why Richard was taken away in hand cuffs? Did his mental illness lead him to commit a crime?

Other than that, I think this was a great story and maybe you can might consider expanding.

Mac

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 12:34pm

sorry Mac, I... well there was a check. Ack my head is for the birds today (nt)


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Jade

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 12:41pm

Sammi


I thought mine needed a tissue. I need a box for yours.

It was sad/happy all wrapped up in one. Very well written. one question bugs me kinda though. Why was the father taken away? hehe we may never know!

great job

Jade

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 12:48pm

Oh my Heather!!!!!


Great job way to hold me to the end. Wondering writing job. So tell me will she ever open the letter? One may never know right? I loved you description of her sitting in the sun. It warmed me up on this gloomy snowy day.

Great Job!

Jade

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 2:07pm

Sad history...


You weaved a lot into few words. Family is very important to Allison, since she cherishes her Mom's picture and her granny's antique doily.

I had some questions: Why had it been five years since the last cheque? Was her dad still alive? And why had she kept the family history a secret?

You did a great job with the exercise. I could not make anything work with that lead sentence yesterday.

Have a good day,

Eyewrite

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 2:08pm

Actually...you were right (m)


The way I worded it ("read it in private") sounds like there was a letter inside the envelope. Thanks for catching that!

Mac

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 2:15pm

A brave soul...


fighting illness and then rescuing a little girl. A lovely direction you took that lead sentence.

Great job describing that childhood story - very creative (the name Norwin, a dragon, and orcs). It's amazing what impact a childhood story can have on a person's life. And on the parent's life as well. I hope the mom and her son can build cherished memories together.

Have a good day, Eyewrite

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 2:27pm

And I was expecting...


that she'd toss the envelope out with the rest of the junk mail - she seemed so careful and deliberate with her actions making her lunch and enjoying sorting her mail.

Good hook, you pulled us in :)

Have a good day, Eyewrite

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