TINY TUESDAY (m)

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Tue, 01-22-2002 - 10:11am

TINY TUESDAY (m)


A while back, we had a Tiny Tuesday exercise where we all used the same opening sentence for our stories. It was amazing to see how many directions the stories went. So this week, please begin your short story with the following sentence.

I stared at the envelope, reading again the word Briamonte.

Have fun,

Mac

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 7:37pm

Great Job, Mac! I really liked the way you...


made us feel like we had read a long, drawn out story about her history in just a few words.

I would like to know more about the boyfriend, though. If she's going to tell him the whole sordid story, I'd like to know more about why! Definitely a starting point worth exploring!

Wendy

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 7:42pm

Your character development...


is as meticulous as your character herself. Very precise and detailed - this was well done. I liked that you didn't tell us what was in the envelope! Sometimes I enjoy the suspense of trying to guess myself!

Wendy

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 7:45pm

Wow, Sammi...


this was wonderful! I love that she can dread hearing from him, and yet still long at the bottom of her heart for him to come home!

You did a great job with the start...thanks!

Wendy

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 7:48pm

This made me howl with laughter!


You developed such a wonderful dynamic here! And such a switch...I have to admit I get tired of the sophisticated mother confused at her daughter's wild antics! This was a wonderful change of pace, and a delight!

Thanks

Wendy

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 8:35pm

Yes, please, me too - who? what? Left us hangin' ! (nt)


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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 8:35pm

Delightful...


Mo-om in five syllables, priceless. Loved the interpersonal conflict, that the daughter hasn't outgrown being ashamed of her mother.

Great short!

Have a good day, Eyewrite

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 8:47pm

Excellent! We've gotta know...


just what did our heroine do to become the Comtesse? What did she give up? And what's the scandal that Briamonte will revel in? Ahh, the love triangles :-)

Great story, want to know more.

Have a good day, Eyewrite

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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 9:03pm

Thanks! n/t


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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 9:05pm

Thanks! n/t


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Wed, 01-23-2002 - 11:17pm

Thanks, eyewrite (m)


I was thinking that one might get inheritance checks in five-year increments (but unfortunately all my ancestors have been poor so I don’t know this for a fact-LOL). Her dad is still alive but Allison has such hatred because she feels he brought on her mother’s suicide that she refuses to have a relationship with him. I think she kept the family secret as a protective mechanism. If she told her boyfriend, he might encourage her to keep the money or try to make her have a relationship with her father, which she didn’t want.

Thanks for your question and critique. It was helpful, as always!!!

Mac

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