TINY TUESDAY...(m)

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Tue, 02-12-2002 - 9:40am

TINY TUESDAY...(m)


This week for the Tiny Tuesday let's try an exercise with voice and since Valentine's Day is just two days away, let's throw in the 'romance genre' just for fun. So try this: Insert this sentence into your piece anywhere you like.

"I watched as her lips parted and a soft sigh escaped as she anticipated my kiss."

Have fun, Sammi

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Thu, 02-14-2002 - 6:07pm

Ooooh...(m)


A vampire(?) twist to this! You're writing voice in this is excellent. Good job, Sammi

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Thu, 02-14-2002 - 7:28pm

Great voice!!! (m)


Your story had such a dry, eerie tone. I loved it! It’s hard to like a vampire (or whatever the narrator wanted to be called) but you made him seem normal. Absolutely a terrific way to use the “I watched as her lips parted…” line.

Good writing, Ramona,

Mac

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Fri, 02-15-2002 - 11:52am

Good creeps, Ramona, and a nice twist for the TT! kat (n/t)


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Fri, 02-15-2002 - 12:24pm

Wow, Ramona...


Voice, sense of darkness, great details, fabulous piece. Excellent, excellent, excellent.

Happy writing, Eyewrite

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Mon, 02-18-2002 - 12:33am

So K....this is where you hang out?!


Just peeked in and found your name, posting something. And of course, I had to find out what you had to say. You're a riot! You really had me going!! LOL you funny girl....awesome story! Love, Deb

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Mon, 02-18-2002 - 2:42pm

It's true Deb! This is a great board, and I love writing short stories...(m)


But you'll see me on the other side too...

kat

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