TINY TUESDAY...(m)
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TINY TUESDAY...(m)
| Mon, 02-18-2002 - 9:50pm |
TINY TUESDAY...(m)
I would like to try something just for fun and to go along with something we discussed last week in chat about dialog and its uses in the 'show versus telling' of a story. So, here's this weeks Tiny Tuesday: Write a short piece using strictly dialog to show all aspects of the story, especially action. Have fun with this, Sammi
P.S. I will be gone for the next two or three days, so I will post mine and respond to others then. Sorry about this inconvenience.

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Hi Patty,
I don't believe that I have had the pleasure of meeting your husband. LOL
When I was first married, I used to think the hubby didn't chew because he didn't want to taste my cooking.But after 20 years I have found thats just the way he eats. I'm glad to hear that he isn't the only guy who inhales his food.
Maria
You're welcome...
and I'm not a farmer's daughter (though I play one on TV). I'm a city girl with farmer uncles. I spend time on a farm only under duress, Lol.
What kind of farming does your hubby do? Grain? Cattle? Pigs?
Eyewrite
Thanks, everyone...
and remember, just say no to pests ;-)
Eyewrite
(btw, Jean Chretien is the Prime Minister of Canada)
My late TT Jess and ?
here is a story that I am working on I had to edit it some so it would work here it was fun so here it goes see if you can figure out whats going on!
Jade
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“Jess Hun please come out.”
“Jess Hun, please say something.”
“Jake leave me alone you are not to be in the Lady‘s restroom!”
“Jess please, I’m sorry.”
“Sure you are. So how long were you going to play this game of hurting me over and over again?”
“Jess please lets go and I will tell you everything you want to know and why.”
“ No, I want to know now, and I am not going anywhere with you.”
“Oh yes you are! You promised me to got up to Montana if I came to this thing and you are going to stick to that promise.”
“Jake I am not going with you!”
“Jake, Put me down now!”
“Sorry Jess, I can’t do that.”
“Ok people the show is over got back to what you were doing, Jess and I are leaving now.”
“Jake stop it.”
“Jess I don’t want you to get hurt please if I let go of your hand will you stay down the helicopter is going and you have to stay low ok .”
“Fine!”
“Thank you Hun.”
“Don’t call me that Jake.”
“ Ok Jess, then don’t call me Jake then.”
“Please take me home.”
“Jess Hun, are you ok? I am sorry I hurt you. Please believe me. I love you more then anything.”
“Please Jake, um... Jim don’t touch me.”
“Ok Jess, can I just help you out so you don’t hurt yourself?”
“NO!”
“Jess , Oh my are you ok?”
“Jess, does anything hurt?”
“Jess, Damn it tell me.”
“Just my heart.”
“Well you would have never fell if you had let me help you Hun.”
“Jess I will let you have my room and I will sleep here, and in the morning we will sort this all out ok?”
“Fine!”
“Where are you going Jess?”
“To get my stuff or did you not bring my bag?”
“Oh I forgot let me go get them.”
“Well Jess, welcome to Glory Mountain Ranch. This is my ranch. If you like tomorrow I will show you around. I promise it looks better in the light.”
“Jess I just wanted to tell you good night and that I love you. Also I promise that if you ask me anything from now on I will be completely honest.”
“Ok, goodnight Jim.”
“Good Morning Hun, sleep well?”
“Yes I did thank you.”
“Are you still mad at me?”
“Sorta”
“Ok why don’t we get up and the we will talk.���
“Ok”
“Well I guess I had better start from the beginning.”
Have a mystical day,
Jade
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I loved it!! Keep up the good job. *nt*
Have a mystical day,
Jade
Please Pray and Support O
heheh sounds like our house!!! WTG My hubby even thought that it was great! *nt*
Have a mystical day,
Jade
Please Pray and Support O
My TT: Self Defense or Murder (m)
“You try hard to cover up that western Mississippi accent, don’t you?”
“I reckon’ but I ain’t really trying to.”
“You shouldn’t either. I find it charming and so will the jury.”
“I doubt those people are gonna be charmed by me. All they’re gonna see is a husband killer. That’s the way them newspapers made me look.”
“No, they’re not and that kind of thinking if going to cost me a trial.”
“Counselor, I’m afraid you picked one that might be impossible to win. You’ve -- ”
“There you go again. You’ve got a bad habit of negative thinking, don’t you?”
“Sorry, but twelve years of having the shit beat out of you will do that to a woman?”
“And that’s what the jury’s going to hear about. The State plans to tell them all about an innocent man that got his brains blew out by you -- this 5’2” ruthless killer. But I plan to show them how you lived in terror each day. How he once shattered every bone in your right hand because he caught you writing about your secrets in a journal you hid under the mattress. How he busted your eardrum when he caught you talking on the phone without his permission."
“Ain’t the jury gonna wonder why I just didn’t leave?”
“You tried, didn’t you? If your statements to the psychiatrist were accurate, I believe you said…yes, here it is…you left on two occasions, which you said both times, ‘he tracked you down and dragged you back home. Each time the beatings got worse.’ Wasn’t that what you said? You thought he’d kill you if you left again. That’s what the jury’s going to hear about.”
“I wanted him to kill me. That’d be better than living with Clance Stiritz for the rest of my life. I knowed I’d made a mistake two months after I married him, but what could I do."
"Nothing. You were only fourteen years old weren't you?"
"Yessir. Mama had run off with some man she met at the bowling alley. The only family I had left was a drunk for a Daddy, who’d sit around night after night listening to George Jones and drinking beer. Are you gonna tell the jury about that crap too? You gonna make them feel sorry for me?”
“Should they?”
“Hell, yeah. I felt sorry for her myself. See after a while you detach yourself, Counselor. That’s the only you make it through the beatings. I learnt that early on.”
“Okay, let’s take a quick break, and when you come back I want to hear about how you were defending yourself the night your husband died.”
Sammi, oh that was sweet! you did a great job keep it up! *nt*
Have a mystical day,
Jade
Please Pray and Support O
Oh My....
Well i guess that what she gets eves dropping. hehe oh my that is funny. Way to go I love it. !!!!
Jade
Have a mystical day,
Jade
Please Pray and Support O
WTG!! Mac, this was great keep up the good work. *nt*
Have a mystical day,
Jade
Please Pray and Support O
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