TINY TUESDAY...(m)

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Mon, 02-18-2002 - 9:50pm

TINY TUESDAY...(m)


I would like to try something just for fun and to go along with something we discussed last week in chat about dialog and its uses in the 'show versus telling' of a story. So, here's this weeks Tiny Tuesday: Write a short piece using strictly dialog to show all aspects of the story, especially action. Have fun with this, Sammi

P.S. I will be gone for the next two or three days, so I will post mine and respond to others then. Sorry about this inconvenience.

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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 8:44pm

Mac...


Thank you for reading my TT if you read the message I wrote to Patty above I hope that explains alot!

Jade

Have a mystical day,

Jade

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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 8:45pm

The ole hidden credit card (m)


to the rescue, thank goodness. Good idea for all of us to keep that in mind when traveling. Great job, Ramona.

Mac

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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 8:46pm

Thanks a bunch, Jade!!! (nt)


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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 8:50pm

LOL-sorry, Patty. I should've (m)


put in a sidenote there with my apologies. Glad you thought the dialect was accurate and I appreciate your kind words about the plotting and all.

Thanks,

Mac

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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 9:01pm

No Cause For Embarrassment - It Was Funny And Realistic! (nt)


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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 10:04pm

Complicated but interesting n/t


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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 10:12pm

Excellent (m)


I really like the plot, and the dialogue was real, and you showed well and you even had dialect.

I found a couple of rough spots but I'm sure you will find them during your rewrite.

Excellent....Maria

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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 10:16pm

Great job of showing n/t


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Wed, 02-20-2002 - 10:23pm

I'm glad you think so (m)


As I mentioned at the chat, I thought I'd screwed up the showing part. So thanks a bundle!!!

Mac

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Thu, 02-21-2002 - 1:35am

Creative cooking, by Michael.


“What in the world? What happened in here!”

“I did just what you told me to do.”

“And what was that, Mister?”

“You said I was to use the big metal bowl. The one in the pull-out drawer in the lower cabinet, and mix in the lettuce, tomatoes, kidney beans, shredded cheese, black olives, taco seasoned meat, avocados, and...ah, tortilla chips, then mix them all together.”

“OK. So once again, what happened?”

“Well, I did just like you said, but the meat looked funny. I’d sprinkled the meat with the taco seasonings, but it still didn’t look right. Not how you make it. That's when I realized that I forgot to cook the meat. So I put the whole thing in the microwave.”

“You did WHAT?”

“I know that it only takes a few minutes for things to cook in there. I set the timer for ten minutes, and then I went to finish my video game. That’s when I heard what sounded like a bomb. Scared the ba-gee-zees outta me. I didn’t know WHAT to do. In fact, I waited a couple of minutes to see if any mask-faced marauders would come crashing in the doors. But when all I smelled was something burning, I thought I better check it out.”

“Michael, don’t you know you NEVER but metal into the microwave. And you can’t cook meat after its been mixed into a taco salad.”

“Guy, like I’m sorry mom, I didn’t know.”

“Lord, just look at the microwave, and that warped bowl! They're annihilated. GOD, there’s taco salad all over the walls, ceiling, floor, window shutters, and my violets are destroyed by toasted lettuce hung from their delicate flowers. I can’t believe you did this Michael! I will never get the avocado green off the white walls.”

“Believe me mom, I will never make taco salad again.”

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