Saturday's Surprise: Open The Envelop...

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Sat, 03-09-2002 - 11:45am

Saturday's Surprise: Open The Envelope (m)


Write a short story (1,000 words or less) where the main character has the nickname you were given during Thursday’s Field Trip (if you didn’t take the trip here’s the link http://pages.prodigy.net/mlemus/mafiaweb.htm).

Happy writing,

Mac

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Sun, 03-10-2002 - 10:38pm

Thanks a bunch, Jade!!! (nt)


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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 8:14am

Is there a (m)


ghost of a chance that you will tell me the rest of the story?

I was hooked into the story then Bam! the book shut and the curtain went up lol

I'm sad but oh well, good idea with lots of possibilites!!!

Maria

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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 9:54am

Maria


Well there might be more to this, one never knows the mind of a writer. Personally I love to leave my readers wanting more. I will see what I can do about finishing up this story for you in the near future. Thank you for your feedback and comments.

Jade

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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 9:58am

Mac....


Thank you so much for your feedback and comments. I almost did not write this story. It took a whole day and then some to come up with the story. Finally I pulled up my writing program typed the name and stared at it for over an hour. well that did the trick and you you all got the story.

Thanks Mac

Jade

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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 10:50am

Hey, Jade, Fantastic story...


What a guest, hey, says no word and helps himself to a beer, lol. You wove suspense in here and left us all wanting to read the rest of the story. Excellent ending, just excellent.

Is it my imagination or all we all improving the more stories we post here?

Take care, Eyewrite

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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 11:35am

Eyewrite


Thank you for your feedback and comments. I am glad that you liked the story! I think that we all are getting better one step at a time. (I hope that I am. I sometimes wander)

Hope you have a great day and thanks again!

jade

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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 12:57pm

Monday Surprise: The Strawberry...


Hi, Note - this piece contains a mobster name that some may find offensive. It's what the mobster nick-name generator came up with and you'll find I've used it in a non-offensive manner.

Enjoy,

Eyewrite

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The Strawberry (and The Bastard)

When I’m invited to play Monopoly, I always bring my own playing piece. I know some people get all superstitious over using the thimble, or the hat, the dog, the convertible, or the revolver. But me, I cannot play without my bronzed strawberry.

A strawberry, you say, how strange. Not really, if you learn that all mobsters have a penchant for sweet red fruits. The Coin Operator, he was partial to raspberries; Ghandi Mangler, he preferred persimmons. The Merciless would roll over and drool for purple passionfruit and the Vole, well, his craving is best left unsaid. Let’s just say you have to know a pretty special fruit stand out in the middle of Nowheresville.

We also have a penchant for redheads, but that’s a subject for a different story.

And why, you may ask, would a mobster play Monopoly. Well, for all the reasons everybody loves playing monopoly. Real estate speculation, evicting tenants, busting pals out of jail. When we’re waiting for a drop, nothing passes the time better than Monopoly, especially since we stopped smoking. Do you know that The Venetian once owned the utilities, the railroads, and had hotels on those tan properties that people land on when they leave jail and managed to bankrupt the rest of us? Course that game lasted fifty-two hours straight and he was the only insomniac, so he had his wits about him when the rest of us were nodding off like security guards at libraries.

Yessiree, ever since Hasbro came out with the portable Monopoly board, we’ve never been without it. Dank cold nights in Chicago spent waiting on Danny TwoFace, moss-growing nights spent in Seattle waiting on Freddy the Finger, sticky thick nights in New Orleans waiting on Marge. Wait, Marge ran The Discerning Mobster’s Brothel, so never mind that example.

One evening in Colorado I was at a community college teaching eye shifting and nostril flaring when the students invited me back to the pub for a game of darts. No thanks, I told them, not interested. When pressed I admitted the only game I played was Monopoly, and do you know what that gang of pubescent orang-utans did? Drove right up to Toys R Us and shoplifted eight boxes of Monopoly in a move that brought tears to the old Bastard’s eyes. Back at the campus bar, we kept the barkeep running the tap until 10am the next morning at gunpoint while we formed alliances, read Community Chest, and took rides on the good old B&O railroad. Needless to say, I won. The chumps gave up ‘cause they were out of practice. I’d also mesmerized them with my trick for rolling the dice.

Later that same morning, Twenty-eyes pulled up to a place that bronzes baby shoes. He’d found the pair he wore when he was a young-un in a box in his dear Mama’s place. Well they turned out so well that we asked what else could we bronze? Fruit? Dangnabbit, I wanted to bronze the strawberry I’d been playing with all night. No sooner said than done, and I was the proud owner of the most beautiful bronzed strawberry.

When I showed Cedar Teeth, he had a great idea – Mobster Monopoly. We could write a proposal for Hasbro and include property names and strategies that were specific to mobsters. After all, there’s Canadian Monopoly, Simpson’s Monopoly, I Love Lucy Monopoly, and National Geographic Mountaineering Monopoly. There’s also NHL Monopoly, Scooby-Doo Monopoly, US Space Program Monopoly and Wizard of Oz Monopoly. And if they can make a Florida State University Monopoly, they can make Mobster Monopoly.

Eight of us put our heads together and worked for four days and nights to write the proposal. We argued. We screamed. We sulked. We moped. We each had the full range of mobster emotions, including waving a loaded gun around and growling in baritone. Each time one of us tried to outsmart the others, we’d gang up on him and immobilize him with fan belts, dog leashes, or palm fronds. When we’d melt from hunger, one of us would dash out, hold up a trendy restaurant, and have fois de grass and crème brulee made to order.

It wasn’t pretty. You know what college students look like during exam weeks? Replace the youth with aging overweight Italians, replace the exams papers with a take-home-essay type paper, and replace calculators and mechanical pencils with hot laptops and spliced DSL service. Replace the beer with, well, beer and you’ll start to get the picture. Bad breath all around.

But we did it, early even. We cleaned up, harassed a few dogs, and delivered our proposal in person. The receptionist fainted when we walked in. I told the Vole to take some breath mints but did he listen?

You’ll understand if I don’t name the specific details for you as we are under consideration with the VP of New Editions at Hasbro. What I can assure you is that there will be a bronzed strawberry playing piece with a bit of good luck built-in.

Cheers!

The Bastard

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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 1:12pm

Go Eyewrite Go.....................


Well this tops the cake! I love it. This was way better then mine you have such a creative mind for this. Don't feel bad it took me I while to write mine also but yours should be put in a hall of fame. oh it was great need I say more!

Great job

Jade

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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 2:09pm

Woohoo! Sweet story. Not such a sweet number--LOL.(nt)


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Mon, 03-11-2002 - 2:24pm

Good one maria. Too bad they're only fiction, huh?(nt)


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