December Exercise...rough, feedback appreciated!
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Hi, I'm Ozarker. I just posted a December writing assignment before I read any of the messages. So I just wanted to introduce myself. I've been writing for about two years and just had my first short story published in a local chap book. I am excited about joining your message board, and hope to increase my skills here in the group. I'd sure appreciate some feedback on the writing assignment. Thanks.
December writing exercise
It was a gold-green July morning. The scents from Mom's rose garden crept through the open window like a peace offering. But the garden, like my mother, was dying and I was unable to save either of them.
Mom's home aide was away for a month. Nothing I'd done or suggested these last few days had relieved my mother's restless anger.
"What are you doing in my house?"
She stood in the kitchen doorway, a fragile wraith with angry brown eyes, her face surrounded by clots of frizzy, graying curls.
Re-post of December Exercise
Windy wanderings for the December excrecise
This is the begining of a project I stared last year...I appreciate any input.
ONE
Greetings
I've been on the board a couple of times - and I am really enjoying the dialogues I see here...I have been a frustrated writer forever and I am hoping participating in some excercises and discussions might get me past the proverbial hump.
I just wanted to introduce myself before I jump into anything... Hi.
Wendy
Hey Charla!
December Writing Excercise: Give me your thoughts, please!
December Assignment
Beth Farren poured two mugs of steamming coffee, savoring the aroma as she set them on the table. She turned to wipe some non-existant drippings, then busied herself scrubbing at a burn mark on the scarred countertop. She listened to the hum of the refrigerator as she tried to formulate the right answer to pacify her friend.
"Will you sit down and talk to me?" Kay's dark eyes were burning, her normally cheerful mouth was drawn tight. She hadn't changed much since high school, still the dark beauty almost ten years later.
REMINDER: If you haven't received feedback on query letter or hooks, please repost on this board. Because we've been
having technical problems, tis the holiday season, and this board archives quickly, not everyone is getting feedback on their posts.So although I know it's a pain, please post here again and ask for feedback. Thanks, Jessica
