Mapping childhood


I need a critc...


Some one please read my work, and email me with your thoughts. I have been writing for ten years, but haven't attempted to really do anything other than poetry with it.


Looking Back RD#2


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Looking Back Rough Draft I


Looking Back Part II


What she is surrounded by:

Her apartment: All things neat and organized. Totes, storage containers, orgainzation. Three working stereos, on at all times of day, blasting blues, R&B, or rock. Two cats: Lucy and Ricky, after the Ricardos Leather furniture, a bookshelf with silver nicknacks, and lots of suspense novels. Entertainment Center: Full of Julia Roberts movies, and Meg Ryan movies, and Sandra Bullock movies. Decoration scheme: The color Blue Center of attention: Living Room

Her Husband:


Looking Back Part I


Name: Kate Chandler Age: 22 Birthplace: Waterville, ME Sign: Gemini, born at 12:01 in the morning

Hair: Blonde, wildly curly, shoulder length Eyes: Blue Skin: Sensitive & Pale Height: 5'10 Weight: 155 lbs, or a size 12

Mental: Hates all things cliche'. Hates people who are mean to old people. Gets depressed watching a person gorge on food. Starves herself when she is mad, sad, or depressed. Loves Chinese food.

Clothing: Loves black clothes, the color red, and black leather. Hates all things polka dot.


Dec. Ex. Part II - Proud Flesh


Thanks for the feedback...


have to tell you, I kept checking the board (rather anxiously!) since the other day, and was getting worried! Had no one responded by today, I was going to ask if my exercise was that bad! SO, thanks!

Now what happens from the initial exercise bio from there - do I continue, or do I go back to what I wrote, and develop that further (for the purposes of this board, I mean). I have to admit, that was fun, and, regretfully, found that a fictional character was awfully close to home! Ouch!

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